"be" mispelt, and "joihould" SHOULD be an English word. XD
For example, when Anakin was fourteen, after all, they had been dispatched to a small, wretched planet with delusions of grandeur.
That "after all" isn't making sense to me in the sentence-- where's the contrast?
You're not doing a very good job of convincing me that you don't find Anakin interesting. I love the first bits where you're all, HEEE HEEEE ANAKIN DUMB. XD And I think you should, one day, write fic where Obi-Wan is happy. Even if it's just for a small scene before the overwhelming suckiness of his existance strikes back. XXXD
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Date: 2005-12-09 09:45 am (UTC)"be" mispelt, and "joihould" SHOULD be an English word. XD
For example, when Anakin was fourteen, after all, they had been dispatched to a small, wretched planet with delusions of grandeur.
That "after all" isn't making sense to me in the sentence-- where's the contrast?
You're not doing a very good job of convincing me that you don't find Anakin interesting. I love the first bits where you're all, HEEE HEEEE ANAKIN DUMB. XD And I think you should, one day, write fic where Obi-Wan is happy. Even if it's just for a small scene before the overwhelming suckiness of his existance strikes back. XXXD
A good way to wake up~.