OK. So, I normally read stories on the sly and not leave comments because I'm terrible like that, but I could not not comment on this: It's so dark, with such a painful twist to it. The writing itself is so so so crisp, and I love the use of the second-person perspective. And this section:
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The money is addictive, and the sex is pretty close to incredible.
Still, you tell yourself, it's going to stop eventually.
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The money is addictive, and the sex is pretty close to incredible, but you know it has to stop sometime.
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Here's how it stops:
followed by the result, and then the reveal. Great pacing.
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branchandroot
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Date: 2008-09-27 11:13 pm (UTC)...
The money is addictive, and the sex is pretty close to incredible.
Still, you tell yourself, it's going to stop eventually.
...
The money is addictive, and the sex is pretty close to incredible, but you know it has to stop sometime.
...
Here's how it stops:
followed by the result, and then the reveal. Great pacing.