Oh my god, how much I love this is ridiculous. The way you slowly slip hints about how Tony sees this guy, the masterful use of second-person POV, the full development of the character through his actions without ever needing to give his backstory.
Your pacing here is just perfect, too- I think that's what I'm enjoying most, reading through your stories- you consistently build up an insane amount of creepy tension with just tiny details. The reveal at the end of what Tony did in the pool was especially fantastic (and horrifying, and extra horrifying in that it felt like it could completely fit with the Tony of the movie.)
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Date: 2008-08-29 02:52 am (UTC)Your pacing here is just perfect, too- I think that's what I'm enjoying most, reading through your stories- you consistently build up an insane amount of creepy tension with just tiny details. The reveal at the end of what Tony did in the pool was especially fantastic (and horrifying, and extra horrifying in that it felt like it could completely fit with the Tony of the movie.)
I hope you don't mind that I'm friending you.