OMG. I'm broken. I've just friended you, and you've broken me. (And I'm trying to catch up with fic - in reverse, but sometimes that's a good thing - and discourses over an insanely slow satellite Internet link, am just playing all kinds of hooky from work, and now feel the urge to flail).
This is ... exquisitely painful. Exquisitely! Holy jeez.
Rhodey looks up at Tony then, with a look you've never quite seen on anybody before -- he almost seems sad, in fact -- and Tony smiles in a way that you've never seen before, either.
Now that is painting a picture. Quite a talent. And it's not a one-shot.
Tony goes absolutely still
And so did I. Stopped breathing and all. You yanked me right into your story, and my reality vanished. Also, not a one-shot.
He takes a strange pleasure in having you tell him what to do so that he can ignore it or, on those occasions when he does what you suggest, act very pleased with himself.
This made me smile and want to cry, all at the same time. I think this is where pieces of me started falling on the floor.
you find that Tony is sitting on the steps that lead from the driveway
He always knows what's going on ... especially after Obediah. And he's always afraid of being left alone. This whole little section is so perfect.
He climbs onto the couch behind you and puts his arms around you; his hair is still wet from the shower.
Beautiful.
and he closes his eyes, then slides down on the couch
Poor, poor Tony. He just wants Pepper back. More pieces of me falling on the floor.
and Rhodey swears that out of the corner of his eye, he sees a red-haired woman in black, waiting for Tony.
Wow. Just wow.
Also, just a couple of catches, in case you want ...
Walking down to the edge of the property to meet Rhody
Rhodey
and every once in a while, he touches on the arm or the shoulder
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Date: 2008-05-29 06:20 pm (UTC)This is ... exquisitely painful. Exquisitely! Holy jeez.
Rhodey looks up at Tony then, with a look you've never quite seen on anybody before -- he almost seems sad, in fact -- and Tony smiles in a way that you've never seen before, either.
Now that is painting a picture. Quite a talent. And it's not a one-shot.
Tony goes absolutely still
And so did I. Stopped breathing and all. You yanked me right into your story, and my reality vanished. Also, not a one-shot.
He takes a strange pleasure in having you tell him what to do so that he can ignore it or, on those occasions when he does what you suggest, act very pleased with himself.
This made me smile and want to cry, all at the same time. I think this is where pieces of me started falling on the floor.
you find that Tony is sitting on the steps that lead from the driveway
He always knows what's going on ... especially after Obediah. And he's always afraid of being left alone. This whole little section is so perfect.
He climbs onto the couch behind you and puts his arms around you; his hair is still wet from the shower.
Beautiful.
and he closes his eyes, then slides down on the couch
Poor, poor Tony. He just wants Pepper back. More pieces of me falling on the floor.
and Rhodey swears that out of the corner of his eye, he sees a red-haired woman in black, waiting for Tony.
Wow. Just wow.
Also, just a couple of catches, in case you want ...
Walking down to the edge of the property to meet Rhody
Rhodey
and every once in a while, he touches on the arm or the shoulder
touches you on
And finally ... thank you for sharing!