why it was worse if it was a triumph that Obi-Wan wasn't there
Yeah, the snip is kind of thin. After a night of sleep, it really does look like the start of something rather than something that can stand by itself, but the stuff about the lack of Obi-Wan and the sculpting, I think I'm going to keep. Like, the thing about Obi-Wan not showing up and him sculpting himself?
It's supposed to be a sign of how fundamentally, down-to-the-core self-centered Anakin is. When he grieves for the past, he's not really thinking about how it's fucked other people over, but instead, he's all focused on how much things suck for him. And showing himself at 21 is was supposed to be a stab at showing how his younger, better self has taken the place of Obi-Wan -- the person that haunts him, tries to make him become better, and with whom he has this immensely complicated relationship.
*pokes snip* Yeah, it's gonna take some forward and backwriting to get it all to really fill in properly, never mind the whole bit about Qui-Gon. XD
One of the things that I've been having an insanely hard time buying about most Vaderfic is how much he seems to get all emo about Obi-Wan as Vader. Um, no, guys, he thought that Obi-Wan had betrayed ihm him. And if there was residual emo left about his old Master, I have a hard time thinking that Anakin wouldn't somehow manage to squish and exclude it. The denial is strong in that one.
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Yeah, the snip is kind of thin. After a night of sleep, it really does look like the start of something rather than something that can stand by itself, but the stuff about the lack of Obi-Wan and the sculpting, I think I'm going to keep. Like, the thing about Obi-Wan not showing up and him sculpting himself?
It's supposed to be a sign of how fundamentally, down-to-the-core self-centered Anakin is. When he grieves for the past, he's not really thinking about how it's fucked other people over, but instead, he's all focused on how much things suck for him. And showing himself at 21 is was supposed to be a stab at showing how his younger, better self has taken the place of Obi-Wan -- the person that haunts him, tries to make him become better, and with whom he has this immensely complicated relationship.
*pokes snip* Yeah, it's gonna take some forward and backwriting to get it all to really fill in properly, never mind the whole bit about Qui-Gon. XD
One of the things that I've been having an insanely hard time buying about most Vaderfic is how much he seems to get all emo about Obi-Wan as Vader. Um, no, guys, he thought that Obi-Wan had betrayed ihm him. And if there was residual emo left about his old Master, I have a hard time thinking that Anakin wouldn't somehow manage to squish and exclude it. The denial is strong in that one.