Of course I do. XD I mean, in the sleep-fogged mood that I was writing this in last night, it seemed like a good idea to slow that sentence down -- I was also thinking of this as being the opening scene to a whole long fic about Qui-Gon coming to him as a ghostie and not wanting to give away the notion of Vader's redemption too soon, but yeah, in the cold light of morning, it doesn't look like the right thing to do.

So I totally appreciate the pointer. I always want to hear flow stuff, y'know?

It's totally weird writing a sympathetic Vader, and the trick easier-said-than-done, as far as I can tell, is trying to make him interesting without wussifying or emo'ing him up toomuch.