ext_3050 ([identity profile] kurukami.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] quigonejinn 2008-09-21 10:18 pm (UTC)

Obadiah puts his arm over her. Tony closes her eyes for a brief moment and tilts her chin up again, and then, quite deliberately puts

They watch the girls on stage...


Puts? Puts WHAT? (And shouldn't that be a black business suit rather than a lack business suit?)

Little nitpicks aside, I howled with laughter, awwwwwed in sympathy, and had more than a few "oh shit!" moments. I so love the way you write; you can evoke emotion and imagery with such economy and eloquence of phrase. : )

On to part 2!

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