ext_278386 ([identity profile] pen-of-iron.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] quigonejinn 2008-08-26 07:20 am (UTC)

Eeeww! That's so wrong!!!

ok, that's just horrifying! it makes the piece i'm working on for the RDJ Kink Meme look like a day in the park with the Teletubbies.

""Shh," he says and grips her by the jaw and slides forward. Not too deep, but not so shallow that he doesn't smile -- her eyes are still fixed on his face."

don't mind me; i'm just gonna go and pour some extra-strength Liquid Drano in my ear now.

seriously, it was fascinating. myself, i might have reduced the number of sections, grouped some of them together to make it read a little more smoothly, but i love the reverse-chronology device.




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